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Tuesday, 15 August 2017

term 3 week 3

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                   The shower was Shiny and sparkly clean before Buster Busted through the  door. Jamie sprinted through the door to get to Buster. Jamie slammed the door and turned the shower on. They were in the shower ready to clean buster but, the icky, slimy mud clogged. Because the drain pipe was clogged. Then the  shower door was stuck and wouldn’t budge. Then buster was trying to run into the. Then the door wouldn’t budge
but then Jamie had an idea what if we try to turn the shower off then Jamie tried to turn the shower off but the handle wouldn’t budge   
 shower wouldn't turn for some reason. Surprisingly buster was trying to opened the window then Jamie tried and the window opened but they had to jump down buster busted out then Jamie jumped out. They went to the authorities then they sprinted to the nearest police station the police called the fire station to go to their house then five minutes later the drainage pipe
was working again. Then the fire men said it was safe to go back in. Then Buster walked in with Jamie.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                               

5 comments:

  1. nice work I think you might need a bet more adjectibes.

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  2. nice work it is amazing but more detail

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  3. Hi hunter i enjoy your work my name is Luca!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  4. Hi Hunter,
    I really like the way you have used adjectives in your writing.
    I wonder how the shower handle broke in the first place.
    Maybe next time you could use a capital letter at the beginning of your story :)

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